Bravely, on a cold and foggy morning, the hunters walked towards the enormous skeleton that was resting peacefully in the middle of nowhere and the skeleton was scary to look at. It was a big one and no one has seen this before . It's a mystery , the questions that they ask themselves were:- What is this?, Where did it come from? Is it really dead and the bones are big?
Kia Ora Hamiora, I love how you used the word Bravely to start your story! And how you ended the story with a question, it's a great idea! Great work Hamiora! Keep up the great stories!
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Alofa
Hi my name's Felix I think your Writing is Awesome! I like all the adverbs and verbs. I like all questions at the end. I have a Question What would all hunters do if it were alive and how would you write it? Blog Ya Later Bye
ReplyDeleteHi Hamiora. My name is Leilani from Room 24.
ReplyDeleteYour writing is very descriptive and really talks about the picture.
Maybe you could use a little bit more adjectives, but apart from that, GREAT JOB!
Would you rather go into the past and see the dinosaurs or travel into the future and see what new animals will appear?
You can check out my blog at: MY BLOG BLOG YA LATER, Leilani.
Kia Ora Hamiora. I'm Maia from room 24.
ReplyDeleteI really like your writing piece. Maybe you could have a bit longer sentences. How long did it take to make it?
Blog you later.